hikaru, please try to post your work in one of the game threads before officially submitting it in the queue; it will help us point out the more obvious flaws before they reach the harsh eyes of the judges and other interested viewers. You still seem to have a long way to go to grasp some of the
guidelines and
rules of the queue; posting your submissions for early feedback will help those who are interested in the games you are running to offer more direct advice in a less judgmental environment.
Also please look to see if there are
other runs of the game, particularly those that take the time to actually complete the game.
Voting no on the basis that this doesn't present a complete run-through of the game and doesn't really offer anything over and above the currently published run (in my opinion).